is also bad because of the subject matter. It should either be "in waves" or "in a wave." Both may be correct, but such an error can be misunderstood if one is incorrect. Set a Scene People respond well to visual cues. His "Chummy Bill Jones, who Smith shared a room with until his resignation from this fellowship in 1683. Winning the fight was still not enough. Although there was a time of intellectual heightening, there came a period of darkness in the development of mathematics (Ewards 45). The phrase "to be given" is awkward here. That's inexcusable at the university level. An introductory paragraph: On March 4, 1849, John Smith was born to Anna Bradcock Smith and James Smith.
It was thought that Jones hated his stepfather and his mother, partly for abandoning him at such a young age. The student meant to say that the belief was such during the historical time period being discussed. Make sure you have a good, clear understanding of what you're being asked. As you write your story, use vivid details to describe the setting and characters so readers are able to visualize what you're writing. If the instructor has to begin by figuring out what the heck is going on, they will automatically have a bad impression of your essay and possibly of you. The paper showed that Smith was a genius, perhaps, but not his rank amongst all of the geniuses that have ever lived.